Susanna Hill’s Halloweensie contest is back! http://susannahill.blogspot.com/
In its fifth year, this contest combines the spooky fun of Halloween with the challenge of writing a short short story – 100 words or less – using the words costume, dark, and haunt.
After you read my 99-word entry below, be sure to head over to Susanna’s site to read all the other spooktacular stories: http://susannahill.blogspot.com/
And if you want to enter your own story, there’s still time. You have until Friday, October 30!
JACK’S FIRST NIGHT
On the dark porch, Jack’s eyes popped opened. First one. Then the other. He spied witches, goblins, a ghost!
With a tingle, a triangle nose appeared. He inhaled crisp air, wood smoke, and apple cider.
A tickle below. A mouth! Mmm… he could taste candy corn and chocolate. No pumpkin pie, please.
He was alive, and yet he felt hollow…
…until warmth filled his middle. His flame heart glowed, lighting the porch.
Costumed children called, “Trick or treat!”
Jack blazed until the witching hour waned and his flame burnt out.
Silence descended. Drowsy Jack dreamt of all things haunted.
Really great how you built it until you realize it is a Jack O’lantern! Good Luck!
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Thanks, Kimberly! Happy Halloween!
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Very cute. Isn’t this a fun contest?
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Thanks, Jen. Super fun contest!
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Nice imagery. Good luck!
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Thanks! Happy Halloween!
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Wonderful! This is the most sensory-filled story I’ve read so far. Very evocative, and I love the concept of the sentient jack-o-lantern coming to life and realizing his place in the world.
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Thanks for your kind comments, Heather! Happy Halloween!
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Great idea, such a sweet story!
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Thanks! Happy Halloween!
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Great imagery – sweet little Jack. I feel bad that his flame has burnt out.
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Thanks, Marla. I’m thinking he can be lit again. Reanimated? Happy Halloween!
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I like the details here! I hope Jack has lovely dreams.
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Thanks, Marlaina. Happy Halloween!
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Great imagery! And I Love the ending. One big metaphor. One big halloween smile.
Happy Halloween, Gabi! 🙂
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Thanks for your kind comments, Clara! Happy Halloween!
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Love the surprise of discovering Jack’s true identity!
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Thanks, Buffy. Happy Halloween!
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Haha, this gave me a tickle after realizing Jack was THE Jack O’ Lantern. A precious story we all can learn from. Great job. 🙂
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Thanks for the kind comments, Robyn!
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P.S. Happy Halloween!
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Hmm, I believe my comments were eaten by gremlins. They love to do that this time of year. I loved your story. It made me giggle when I discovered who Jack was. Fantastic. Happy Halloween, Gabi.
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Wow, I love it! I didn’t realize until the end who the main character was. Great job!
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Thanks, Linda! Happy Halloween!
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Good luck! Happy Halloween!
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Happy Halloween!
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Good job. I love the imagery 🙂 Good luck to you!
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Thanks, Christie! Happy Halloween!
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Great imagery. My fav line: His flame heart glowed, lighting the porch.
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Thanks, Stacy. I appreciate hearing your fav line. Happy Halloween!
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Totally love the carving experience of this Halloween jack-o-lantern.
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Thanks, Teresa. Happy Halloween!
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Cute and clever, Gabi! Love this story from the Jack-o-lantern’s POV, feeling him come to life for his important night! Thanks so much for joining in the Halloweensie fun!
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Thanks, Susanna. This is such a fun contest! Happy Halloween!
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Oh Gabi…I love this story from the POV of the pumpkin that becomes the Jack-O-Lantern…wonder if the next step is pumpkin pie. 😉
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Thanks, Vivian!
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Great twist on letting the pumpkin give his POV 🙂 Good luck!
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Thanks, Charlotte!
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